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The Khanum
05-06-2005, 08:14 PM
This is what happens when an English teacher tells his class to write a Shakespearean sonnet on "whatever they like." I hate to rhyme (which iambic pentameter Shakespearean sonnets must do), and I hate having to have a certain amount of syllables (again, a Shakespere thing). So...here's what I wrote. Based on Erik, of course...not too good, but I figured that since it's about Phantom, I might as well post it.

Angel in Hell

Should my belief in this unwanton lie
Fall victim to these nights of chilling gloom,
Your spirit, white and pure, would surely die
Beneath these shadow-ridden wings of doom.

Resist! The death of this cold heart draws near.
Your talk of summertime is in your reach.
Don't stay to rid yourself of guilt and fear.
Abandon me to darkness, I beseech.

An angel can't survive in Hell for long.
The end has come, my soul of weeping song.

:cd1: < Ah! That's so great!

The Phantom
05-06-2005, 08:57 PM
Your poem that you wrote in English class is really good! I love the use of the lyrics from Phantom and the dark mood that it came out with. The words are lined out perfectly and I like your use of them. If you write any more poems please post them for us. :)

Always_Erik_Fan
05-10-2005, 04:40 PM
Very nicely done... *applauds* I really like the feelings you brought through... *gives Erik clone for doing so well* BRAVA!

The Khanum
05-10-2005, 08:38 PM
Yay! Another clone to add to my collection!

::Smiles sinisterly at the other Erik clone lurking in corner::

~The_Phantom_is_Sexy

Marguerite
05-21-2005, 03:38 AM
*gasp* Love it! You make writing that stuff seem so easy.

~Marguerite~

bahamamama21890
06-18-2005, 08:58 PM
That was insanely good (sorry I'm just looking at it now, since it was posted quite a while ago)!!! Really, that was awesome, tell me when you post more because I'd love to read it. :)

Luciana
08-29-2005, 05:50 AM
Wow, you wrote that for a class? I never actually put effort into my school poetry. *looks amazed* That opens a whole new world for me. :D

It's really good, I hope you write more.

The_Persian
08-29-2005, 02:06 PM
::faints:: That's sooooo good!
Man... what can't you do?
hmpf...