Poem: Two Little Teenagers

[Keiji Yamagata]

Title: Two Little Teenagers ...
Rating: PG 13 so I don't get prodded
Genre: Angsty >.> Poem
Author Note: This seems unfinished to me, but this is all that it is ever going to be o_________O rhyme!

Two Little Teenagers ...

Two little teenagers, sitting in a tree
One was in love, and the other didn't see
That his best friend loved him, his best friend was gay
His best friend was planning to kill himself
Because he was ashamed ...

Two little teenagers, in the graveyard
One was buried six feet under, the other was scarred
His best friend was dead, and the only explanation he had got
Was a suicide note saying, "I love him ... he loves me not."

[The Floor]

Nicely done - really sad; I'd like to see an expansion on this, if you ever feel the urge to continue the story with other styles of poetry. You captured the feelings really nicely!

[Chance_or_Destiny]

I agree with teh seductress, it was very intense and I'd like to see where it will go. I'd also like to see some of your other work because i can appriciate your talent eager to see what your doing with it.

[AAW0487]

Wonderful piece Danyel! It was sad but quite moving! I would also like to see an expansion on this if you ever feel that it needs a bit more. And I would also love to see any more of your work as well! Brava! Keep up the great work!