A New Tear

[Kiri_Giry]

A new tear,
A fresh tear,
is falling from me,
Another part of me,
that can't breath,
that can't see,
than can't think,
since you came in,
and tore to pieces,
the walls i took so long,
to build,
a new tear,
a fresh tear,
falling from me.

:tp3:

[The Countess]

Oh, this is beautiful, ma amoure. You know just how to put something and that's what I love most about your writing. It's really deep *tear*

[Kiri_Giry]

Thanks. I don't like it actually. It's supposed to be Erik's scrambled thoughts after Christine leaves. I think it's too... too boring. I don't really know but thanks for the compliment. God knows I'd never give them to myself. :)))

[The Countess]

It's not boring, it's poetic. It's a poem for crying out loud. If you want more spice, try going for a more brooding approach next time. I love it the way it is, though.

[Kiri_Giry]

Thanks lovey