A pull to my soul (poem)

[Night feather]

okay I've just made this poem yesterday, I was inspired by two fanvideo's, one called "love me" by Lisa, and another one called "I don't know to let you go" by Amanda, both very melancholic...

I quite like it myself, but I'd like others opinion...

---A pull to my soul---

The melancholy of your music in me
Reaching places I never wanted the world to see
But to flee from you is not an option for me

Unable to stay, unwilling to leave
I remember those word you spoke to me
And It lures me back every time I leave

The madness surrounds us both
Connected in ways that no one knows
Then why is it only the pain we can show

it's a pull to my soul, bittersweet and sad
All we've dreamt of, but never had
To scared to reach out, and it's driving me mad

Hold me tight and whisper of nights
Forget the world and its promise of light
Let the pain go away and our love burn bright

What do you guys think?

[Night feather]

Is it really that bad?

I don't appreaciate flames, but I love constructive critism, should I change soemthing?

[Luciana]

No, I think it's really good. I just didn't head over to the writing until today. *Hangs head in shame*. If you write any more, I'd like to read them, if you don't have a problem with that.

My personal favorite line was it's a pull to my soul, bittersweet and sad I don't know why I like that, but it sounds so deep. :D :duck: