I am not as you are

[Silvermasque]

Freestyle and ambiguous, my two favourite styles, the question is, who speaks the poem? Erik? Or myself?

I am not as you
I am more dangerous than you
You live in a world of society
Governed by what you believe is of importance beyond yourself

But I am not as you are
I have loved deeper, longer, more passionately
I live in a world of intricate knots
Controlling ties
Never ending lies

I am not content as you are
My life is not lived as yours is
I do not seek admittance to your simplistic ideals
For I have felt more pain than your mortal body could hold

For I am not as you
My eyes warned you the day we met
I am silent when you scream
And you weep when I would smile

I am not as you would be
I have no need for your transparent games
My love is too strong
My life is too bold
My heart beats in time with a world you can never imagine

And I am happy there

[composer15]

Oh wow Adibug, I love this poem it's fantasitc, brilliant, what more can I say?

Hmm, tough question, is it Erik or you who speakes in this story?
Well I'm going to say it is Erik because of the following lines:

"But I am not as you are
I have loved deeper, longer, more passionately
I live in a world of intricate knots
Controlling ties
Never ending lies"

"For I have felt more pain than your mortal body could hold"

"For I am not as you
My eyes warned you the day we met
I am silent when you scream
And you weep when I would smile"

But the line that confuses me is "And I am happy there." That makes me believe that it is you because Erik was far from happy. I could be completley off but that's just my opinion. Write more please, I enjoy your work :)

[phantomphreak]

This is beautifully written and well thought out. It flows extremely well and it doesn't weigh the reader down. I love writting freestyle poems! I think you are comparing your life to Erik's perhaps? I'm most likely wrong, but that is what it seems like.

My favorite section is this:

"I am not as you would be
I have no need for your transparent games
My love is too strong
My life is too bold
My heart beats in time with a world you can never imagine"

It just seems to me like it is the climax and stands out among all the other sections! Over all, great work!

[Silvermasque]

Well in fact your both right, I wrote it trying to explain how you can say you love a man tangled in the world of legend and fiction (I'm sick of trying to explain it to my friends) and who to "normal" societies eyes, doesnt exist (I find that insulting, thus I am an antisocial freak with nocturnal hours *sigh* I loved my life) The "And I am Happy there" line is obviously me,
"Controlling ties
Never Ending lies" flows so well, I love it, but my favourite line would have to be this
"But I am not as you are
I have loved deeper, longer, more passionately"
That absolute feeling of intense love, how does one describe it?
phantomphreak, I guess I am kind of comparing my life to Erik's living within society is just as if not more constricting and exclusive than living outside of it.
composer15, you're not off, by nature I'm either withdrawn and silent, watching everyone around me, or crazy and up on stage, belting my guts out in song, I swing like a pendulum, this poem was written to give feeling to the thoughts that run through our heads that cant be described.

Thankyou both for your replies! It makes me feel so special and loved! I'm thrilled you liked it and took the time to reply! Thankyou!