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Always_Erik_Fan
04-26-2005, 03:43 PM
I started writing this before work yesterday and just wanted to know what everyone thinks of it! Please give me your HONEST feedback&constructive criticism!!! Thank you!
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TITLE: Inside Her Kiss
AUTHOR'S NOTE: I wrote the song; it's sung to the tune of the line about "Those haunted eyes..." I know it's not an exact fit, but I'm not exactly musically inclined!
SUMMARY: It's been two months since the Opera House burned down. Where is Erik? (From his POV)

She kissed me and I knew I couldn't kill her lover, so I sent them away. And then I left, just missing the mob who were pursuing me. And now I'm here; without a mask, without fear, without her.

Why did she choose him? I gave her everything she never knew she wanted! Even now I refuse to glance at the papers because she is always on the cover. Last week I saw her picture and bought the paper. She looks so happy...

She's starring in a production of "Romeo and Juliet," her first role since "Don Juan Triumphant." Then I was looking through the rest of the paper when I saw the words that ripped my heart to pieces: "Famous Diva and Viscount to Wed." I cursed and ripped the paper to shreds as if that would bring her back...

Her kiss... Oh it was glorious! In her kiss I finally felt love! I could have lost myself forever in her kiss, had she let me. Despairingly, I hum that oh-so-familiar tune and softly begin to sing:

And in her kiss
Everything I long to feel
Her sweet, sweet kiss
That both burns and lets my spirit soar

Thinking about Christine's kiss, I finally break down and let the tears flow for the first time since she left...

In her kiss, I finally found what I'd been looking for, and in her kiss I'd finally found the courage to truly feel again.

~~The End~~

Marguerite
05-02-2005, 10:53 PM
Lovely! It seems like it could go on. You should continue it, whenever you feel so inclined. ^_^

~Marguerite~

Oh, how silly of me, it says in the subject that this is only part one. **doink** Well, I can't wait to read the rest!

~Marguerite~

cinty
05-03-2005, 01:08 PM
Awww.. that is so lovely!!

Always_Erik_Fan
05-03-2005, 04:30 PM
Thanks! People on the other board I posted this on said I should continue it too... *ponders* I'll tell ya'll what I told them... Gimme an idea HOW to continue it and I might! :)

getzell
08-10-2006, 02:48 AM
Oh its so sweet I cryed its that good

eriks_muse87
08-10-2006, 04:15 AM
Yes. It is definitely a delightful ending. I hope I see a lot more from you; you are most definitely very creative and aware of the circumstances you write about. Brava.